I am told I write well. This is no accident. I have practised hard for many years. As a slight example I dwelt on the word ‘for’ in the previous sentence, replaced it with over’, spoke the sentence aloud and then reinstated ‘for’. I am also a minimalist with punctuation. I accept Lynn Truss’ criteria in Eats Shoots & Leaves but add my own question. Is a particular item of punctuation essential? Is there misunderstanding or ambiguity without it? No. Then leave it out.

I have studied my craft. I delight in getting beneath the surface of words. I insist on knowing why a sentence works. It gives me great satisfaction to take 1000 words and reduce them to 600. To reduce the previous paragraph in this manner I would delete ‘in the previous sentence’ from the fourth sentence. Reducing to 300 is quite different. P.G. Wodehouse interested me when he refused me a 10-6 reduction and insisted I employ my 10-3 tricks of précis and synopsis…which runs off the tongue better than ‘synopsis and précis’. Span and spick jars. Spick and span is fine.
So I was all astonishment when reading Persuasion…Jane Austen’s last completed novel written in 1815 twenty years after Pride and Prejudice first saw the light of day as First Impressions. Austen had invented the literary trick of free indirect speech with its power to embody dramatic elements within the flow of the narrative...something Ernest Hemingway was much skilled at. The trick is to use actual phrases but indirectly so the narration combines the voice and moral perspective of the original speaker with those of the reporting or narrating agents.
In The Language of Jane Austen (Oxford 1972) Norman Page illustrates the point. ‘How Anne’s more rigid requisitions might have been taken is of little consequence. Lady Russell’s had no success at all – could not be put up with-were not to be borne. ‘What! Every comfort of life knocked off! Journeys, London, servants, horses, table,-contractions and restrictions every where. To live no longer with the decencies even of a private gentleman! No, he would sooner quit Kellynch-hall at once than remain in it on such disgraceful terms.’
Here is an example of Jane Austen’s subtlety in Mrs. Clay’s remarks to my son’s namesake John Shepherd… Estate Agent to Gentlemen of Fine Breeding & Delicate Sensibilities. ‘Certainly sailors do grow old betimes; I have often observed it; they soon lose the look of youth. But then is not it the same with many other professions, perhaps most other? Soldiers in active service are not at all better off; and even in the quieter professions there is a toil and a labour of the mind, if not of the body, which seldom leaves a man’s looks to the natural effect of time. The lawyer plods, quite care-worn; the physician is up at all hours, and travelling in all weather; and even the clergyman -‘she stopt a moment to consider what might do for the clergyman;- ‘and even the clergyman, you know, is obliged to go into infected rooms, and expose his health to all the injury of a poisonous atmosphere.’ Jane Austen has her continue.
‘In fact, as I have long been convinced, though every profession is necessary and honourable in its turn, it is only the lot of those who are not obliged to follow any, who can live in a regular way, in the country, choosing their own hours, following their own pursuits, and living on their own property, without the torment of trying for more; it is only their lot, I say, to hold the blessings of health and a good appearance to the utmost: I know of no other set of men but what lose something of their personableness when they cease to be quite young.’
This passage has little immediate bearing on the plot. A 10-3 reduction would have it deleted. It could be removed for an abridged version. But the sentiments expressed are as radical as anything from Wordsworth and the Romantic Poets. Indeed we have here echoes of John Keats’ Ode to Indolence. Three hundred years on we have made little progress towards the society implied. Mrs. Clay spoke on for two reasons…and only one was relevant to the plot.
Jane Austen was acutely a-tuned to the Establishment of her age…and realised its relevance to all establishments at all times. Establishments dislike nothing more than those who blurt out loud what everybody knows but prefer to leave unsaid. It embarrasses people. Parvenues who think to join the Establishment while elbowing aside the delicate web of hypocrisies, deferences and understandings that support it infuriate the Establishment’s old guard.
This is Tony Blair’s real crime in the Cash for Peerages Scandal creeping ever closer to 10 Downing Street. Matthew Parris made the point in his column in The Times last Saturday. ‘Imagining that all he needed to do was cloak an outright gift in the garb of a soft loan was slapdash to the point of arrogance. If this was camouflage, it was cursory.’







